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with :acquiesce
agree
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uncountable; consider using: "much extent", "a good deal of extent".much
extenta good deal of extent
a number of extent
seriously
concerned that the drawbacks it brings
can be detrimental to the living society. It is understandable that being able to This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced
with :purchase
buy
substantially
beneficial. Saving money
is probably
the first
and foremost merit of this trend. Instead
of spending a
significant amount of monthly expenditure on clothes or necessities as they This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced
with :exploited
used
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with :nowadays
now
In addition
, the
availability of low-priced products grants consumers more spending choices and boost overall
consumption. Since
products become more affordable and accessible, even low-income people This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced
with :nowadays
now
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variousneeds
However
, I strongly
believe that purchasing cheaper goods has its downsides
which seem to overshadow the benefits. Firstly
, health threats to consumers and workers are two major
problems of this trend. To save costs, manufactures may accept the usage of unsafe This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced
with :economical
cheap
undoubtedly
affect customers‘ health. Moreover
, mass production is
also
associated with worker
exploitation and international outsourcing systems that render poor countries labor-intensive. Secondly
, the cost-effectiveness
of this practice is not guaranteed since products of lower prices usually
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with :approacharrive
come
Therefore
, in certain cases, customers may not save money This words can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
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have to
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced
with :rectify
fix
In conclusion
, people‘s access to cheaper products has its This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced
with :possess
own
However
,
the shortcomings are more remarkable that they should be taken
into serious consideration.